Photo 2 this is a dorm where we get rest and eat dinner, even though it looks big, our room is really small, I live on the third floor at 303 I live there with my roommates.
Photo 3 this is a soccer field where we usually play soccer and do our CA, I always try to play soccer, but I am too lazy to move around.
Photo 4 this is where I usually walk down when I go to my classes, it's kind of steep, so when I ran down last time, I twisted my ankle.
Photo 5 this is minjok education center where we sometimes have our blog class, we do not publish our stuff here, we usually write our draft and check it.
Photo 6 this is what E- building's hallways, it is flat even though it's built on a steep road.
Photo 7 this is what it looks like inside the classrooms in the E-building, our class is now posting our stuff with Ms.Heike our blog writing teacher
Be sure to upload your diamante poems and reflection essay :)
ReplyDeleteI will give you an overall comment based on what I have read for the last two weeks. Your writing skills are decent, and you have the ability to express your thoughts in English. However, you need to write sentences more specifically. For example, in the creative story "Dream", you could have improved your story by explaining more about the setting. Still, I liked your creative story :)
What you can improve later on is trying out with complex sentence structures, which will definitely make your essay clearer and more detailed. Your sentences seem to be limited to simple sentences. There are many complex sentence structures, such as independent and dependent clause (I wanted to go hiking; however, I couldn't hike because it was raining), appositives (A person exceptionally talented in mathematics, John Nash became an eminent professor), modifiers, and so on. There are several ways to improve and practice complex sentence structures. One way is to read several books. I recommend you to read "Newberry Awards books", books which have received critical acclaims from authors and readers. Such books include "the giver", "a girl named disaster", and "Charlotte's Web"
Have a nice summer. If you have any questions, feel free to call me on facebook. You will be able to find my account by searching "Sun Woo James Park".